Apollyon Posted April 9, 2003 Share Posted April 9, 2003 Post your poems here, only 1 per post and please leave comments about other people's poems as well! There's nothing more selfish than just posting your poems looking for compliments! :POne of mine to start: Death and Destruction The monastery dark,a curse's forgotten mark.Emptiness within this hall,heralding an apocalyptic fall.The old oak dead.Blight and poverty - with these things fed.Death within this wood.Gone is nature, clean and good.The swift river dryand with it so many die.No more joy lies here,all is gone but pain and fear.Mankind is slaughtered.Through arrogance have we faltered.No more life.No more joy.None but those in the devil's employ. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
exatreide Posted April 9, 2003 Share Posted April 9, 2003 Not Bad. Good work. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted April 9, 2003 Author Share Posted April 9, 2003 Post one of yer own fool! ;) :POh and thanks :) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
exatreide Posted April 9, 2003 Share Posted April 9, 2003 This is one of my Older Ones...I wake up to a creak outside my door.Must be the cat I comfort my self.But the Cats sleeping beside me.Must Be my dad. But my dad never walks by. It can't be someone else i would have heard them enter.Least my doors locked.I think.The handel turnes.I hold my Breath.It dosn't open.I relax.Theres a loud crack against my door.Wood splinters hit me in the face, my cat jumps away.I see my knife lying on the floor.Fight or flight....I cant jump out the window on the roof Wood brakes in from the door.Seconds to chosefight or flight....I chose to fight.I grab the knife.I won't atack him I would die.I close my eyes and pretend to sleep.He brakes the door down and charges me with a knife.I surprise him with my own.But to late.Are Blades Peirced each otherHis Firey blood shot eyes don't blinkHis mouth turnes to grinning and blood escapes but not a sound escapes as he fades awayI push him off Seeing my own wound. Worse then his.The Pain hits me Nocking me down. My hands clamp over the wound.Vainly trying to stop the bleedingVainly trying to hold onVainly Trying to hold my fleeing soul.A muffled cry escapes my lips muffled by a wave of blood Fight or flight.....Fight or flight..... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted April 9, 2003 Author Share Posted April 9, 2003 Pretty good, if a little unsettling ;)Here's another of mine:Dark WailingsStricken with the gasping fear Horror upon horror - a fallen tear.What is this that cries in the dark?Hold head high, listen, hark.Over and under passage not found,A world destructive, chaos unbound..Helpless havoc trembling adulation.Hope is in pain and all in conversion.Trees move and stars fall.The birds now scream instead of call.Rest not for tumbling down,The forgiveness lost from fading frown.It is this which cries in the dark:It is fear and death, destruction reaped,Always awake and in blood steep’d.And so you cower awake in the dark.Afraid to hold head high, listen or hark. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
exatreide Posted April 9, 2003 Share Posted April 9, 2003 I liked that one.WORLD WAR ONE!Twilight.Twilight from above.Resting soilders.Await the next battle.Calm.The whislte blow wakes those asleephands to rifilseyes alert.Shrieking Childrenfall from hellLions roar defeans all.Needels of steel fall on thosenot ready todieRifils discharge night sky aruptwith flamesSteel on steelJab parry thrustRepeatThe blood the painthe flames thatwain.Friends and foe fall indeath.enimies in lifeunited in death.Twilight from aboveall is calm Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted April 9, 2003 Author Share Posted April 9, 2003 I think I remember when you last posted that one. I like the beginning and the end especially and the contrast of the calm with the violence of battle.Another (one that I posted before):Clarity in Light and DarkI spoke to the darkexpecting no answer.Hearing I stood,afraid of the void.Hark came a voice,so twisted yet clear,its layers shaped meall to its whim.It spoke of evil,of the dark things that lurk.And then in responseI denied it all.My mind ignored, cut at the edges.The memory warped.So hard to find.I spoke to the lightexpecting no answer.Hearing I stood,listening keen.Behold was a voice,so clear and true,my heart leapt at its highsand sank with its lows.It spoke of heaven,of all things good,of kindness and truth.And I knew it was so.I knew it was so,that all was a lieand that evil and goodwere shadows aside. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMA_1 Posted April 9, 2003 Share Posted April 9, 2003 cool stuff guys :) here is mine.Under This SunShade tree sings till evening comeswhen your world forms shadow and nullbut beauty is relative, its all been doneunder this moon, and under this sunMelencholy is expressive of self pitythe scars you have are relatively smallYou toil and cry, with tears in your eyeunder your hope, im over it allfaith in grace to attain the name saint sing the deepest, weakest hymnsAll that you are is worthless in the endunder our God, over our sinsForever to remember the september I knewOf pain and gain where the shade tree grewBeauty is relative, its all been doneunder this moon, and under this sun. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aeris Posted April 10, 2003 Share Posted April 10, 2003 These are all really cool! I especially like "Death and Destruction." Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted April 10, 2003 Author Share Posted April 10, 2003 Very nice TMA, good use of repetition of the last line of the first and last stanza =).another:CancerCrawling, creeping,silent weeping.Slowly slithering silently.Always there, always hidden. Penetrating the thoughts within.Once finding of the placerests its head upon the softpillow of the hopeless mind,never set, ever weak.Weakened further, poisoned with blight.Dripping, calling,Deadly mauling.Wherever walked the truth belieshopeless tales, they never die.But hopeful chants, whispered in the souls of those who cannot fleenor sleep without the cursing appraisalof false beliefs and dreaded laws. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMA_1 Posted April 11, 2003 Share Posted April 11, 2003 We die with the passing of leviathencry from the loss of the righteous djinna demon that gave life from birthbegan within hades below sand and earthour hell turns to paradise before our eyeswhile your heaven turns to grassy demiseso you sink back to the abyss for the old waysbut the water promises shortened and painful daysYou came and cursed us with your evilbut the blessing of your holy water was revealed we may no longer curse and praise your nameit is all but clouded in our sin and shameour water cannot wash our problems awayyour name will no longer be proclaimed in all our daysforgive us shui hulud Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
exatreide Posted April 11, 2003 Share Posted April 11, 2003 His Name Brings Peace.His Name Leads Milliions into battle.His name causes A Galaxy to Erupt in StrifeHis Name Spells Death to his enimies.His Name is hated by its holderHis Name is spit apon by non beliversHis Name Is worshiped Like a GodHis Name Is Mau DibI know it sucks, something i thought of it 10 seconds... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMA_1 Posted April 11, 2003 Share Posted April 11, 2003 Outcry: a prose dialogFaith is ignorance__________Is it?__________Your prayers are words in the wind__________but if I am right, your life is as worthless as wind__________Christians have always killed to convert throughout history__________Christians are humans and are apart of humanity, humanity has always killed throughout history__________Your religion is like belief in the tooth fairy__________Your life is devoid of understanding belief. You judge what you do not know__________You are closed minded__________You are a man who curses religion and praises openness of individual opinions, you hypocrite.__________your God is just a silly assumption__________Funny that you say that, you are the one that believes alien life is inevitable__________When will you evolve past religion?__________When will you evolve past destructive thoughts and actions?__________You just use religion as a crutch__________at least I show my weakness'. you hide them inside, and argue to find the metaphysical answer you secretly desire__________why are you so blind?__________Why are you so bitter?__________At least I have my independance, you are chained to a non existant God.__________At least I have a dependance on something. You depend on imperfections__________How do you know there is a God?__________I dont, I have faith. Something that you will probably never have. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
exatreide Posted April 16, 2003 Share Posted April 16, 2003 I have wrote about 9 poems today. Half of them about dune.here is the first oneSook sook sook!the cry of the water sellersook sook sookcry the envy of all!oh what richs he contains!and what richs he shall recive!Sook sook sookthe cry of the water sellerthe envy of all. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMA_1 Posted April 17, 2003 Share Posted April 17, 2003 oh man what an amazing beat! you wouldnt happen to have any others.... would you??? wink wink ;) heheyes it was really good man, send down another. I owuld love to read more. :) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
exatreide Posted April 17, 2003 Share Posted April 17, 2003 Why yes TMA now that you mention it.Maud'dib!Maud'dib!We cryOur throats begging for a tearMaud'dibMaud'dibWe crySaviour of ys all!Maud'dibMaud'dibleader of the Djihad!Maud'dibMaud'dibWe cryVoice from afar!Maud'dibMaud'dibWe cryAnd cry we shall.comments? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMA_1 Posted April 17, 2003 Share Posted April 17, 2003 cool man, send another. I like dune poetry. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DukeLeto Posted April 17, 2003 Share Posted April 17, 2003 Acriku had a good one somewhere, "Come Arrakis" I think it was called. :) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
exatreide Posted April 17, 2003 Share Posted April 17, 2003 Spartans above allso mighty do they seem?their shields and speers seemunstopableso mighty do they seem?better shots then alltheir arrows peirce the thickest armorand their gaze cuts them from afarNo Persian stood his groundFleeing to afarfear the mystic SpartansWho shine above all Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Vanguard3000 Posted April 19, 2003 Share Posted April 19, 2003 Was bored. Made some Dune haiku. Blah.LetoArrakeen moonlightOn an endless sea of sand.Can I love this land?Museum FremenRain on Arrakis!A brave people lost in time.New replaces old. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted April 19, 2003 Author Share Posted April 19, 2003 Nice work all of you =)Man-Made GodIs it not the beating of thy heart,Or the magic in thy artThat creates the equilibrium of life?It is that which we hold dear;Bursting thoughts transcending fear.Echoing the long-past tremulous lies,"Eat not for your damnation it belies"But worms worm deep,Always feeding - never sleepAnd the empty husk sits lonely.Look there, atop the world:Ravens wings are now unfurled,Fluttering in celestial conspiracy.For it is this which is so very clear,If only you could see. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TMA_1 Posted June 24, 2003 Share Posted June 24, 2003 Here is a poem I wrote just a few seconds ago, though I should share it. Why do people have the faith to believe in something they dont know is real? Because to them, their faith is the factor in creating a reality even more sensual than this one. Song of Debt five, four, counting down to one.Fellowship lasts till the setting of the sunI'll lay my head for the moonless nightto wake up in daylightFor five years I have plannedplotted, schemed, and underhandedfor one second I repayed the five yearsand that is what I fearedtime just flows, as my tears flow for dawnwhile I wake up to walk in my open lawnand think of what mistakes I have madeso many, so many mistakes to pay.I cant give credit or loans, I have so many debts to paywhen in debt, it doesnt work that wayso I sit in my swing all day longknowing that my life will be drawn upon.Shed those tears for fears of painmy debt has grown, the tax payers gainall the money of spirit I owethey want my soul, so my debt will continue to grow.i still have something more. Something of goldthey never want it and it hates the hands it holdsspirit can fear it, but the immortal will stayfrom moment into timeless sun my fears are washed away.from day to day. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted June 24, 2003 Author Share Posted June 24, 2003 That's great, TMA :). I like the way you mixed something more mundane, such as debts and loans etc with faith, which is less tangible. I'm glad you bothered to look up this thread instead of just creating a new one and I hope more people will post poems of their own here.Here's one of mine then:The MazeBefore me lies the Maze.Twisting corridors and tall wallsthat frame the passing of the dayand greet the sun that dips low beyond the horizon.Before me lies the darkness.A storm so full and thick,no light can pierce this black heart. Here all is decay, mindless and dull.Before me lies the light.Long off the goal I seek,that prize eternal,life and its aim that battle for glory.I have sought for long, for centuries past and more besidesand yet I can only despair.For this maze is never-endingor thus it seems to me.I search and search but never my goal is found to beanywhere here nor anywhere near.Always return I to this place so darkand destructive in its great tempestuous force.Each time I approach this place of wandering spite,my spirit is weakened, torn like thin paper,storm-tossed as a ship.Worse and worse I grow.How long can this continue thus?I ask myself and yet the reply,expected by me as a message divine,can never be heard over the clammering gale.And I know: I am the cause.I am the cause for this tempest darkthat destroys all over, under and other around.But it is too late for transcendance.To change nigh-on impossible.Not that that matters.This will be the last time around the maze for me. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
gunner154 Posted June 26, 2003 Share Posted June 26, 2003 DenialYou can't give it all up again!This ain't another way, or a dayWhen I remember everythingEvery lesson that you taughtEvery little thing you broughtBecause I won't give upDespite my tough luckEven though I have felt painI won't give up everythingUnlike youI'm dusting, I'm feeling, I'm searching everywhereFor youYou have no shameYou gave up everythingNo matter how I triedNo matter how I liedTo keep you on the trackDespite your many lacksI kept my own coolEven though I felt movedBecause this isn't youI won't become youYou've lied enough to meAnd I won't accept your treatStand up, you have no shameCome out and feel the painYou can hide from meBut not from realityI'm dusting, I'm feeling, I'm searching everywhereFor youI'll trust you no moreI'll love you no moreBecause you're no moreIn the very eyes of lawYou have fled againTo seek your every gainI'll give up on you againAnd deny you everythingDon't try to stop meYou have to beat meYou have to overthrow meTo get all you needBecause you have changedInto something I can't tameYou'll know you won't see meThe same way that you knew meWhen we metI'm dusting, I'm feeling, I'm searching everywhereFor youSometimes I feel I'm doing everything for youDespite the things you said and everything I've lost in youRecalling everything little thing that you have done to meI know you're trying to deny me but I won't give upFor youI'm dusting, I'm feeling, I'm searching everywhereFor you (Note: This is a RAP (except the chorus part). If you don't know how to rap and find this "poem" silly, you are advised not to comment.) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Acriku Posted June 27, 2003 Share Posted June 27, 2003 Acriku had a good one somewhere, "Come Arrakis" I think it was called. :)Yeah, took me a while to find it...The trees blowing in the wind, escape ArrakisThe rainshowers of spring keep the animals under the rocks,The fish surrounding the pillars of the docksThe birds overhead shouting at the birds underhead, escape Arrakis.Come Arrakis.The trees crumble into sand, blown by the windThe rainshowers evaporate in the sky,The fish gasps and replenishes the ground where it lieThe birds fall down disappearing into the sand.Come Arrakis. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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