I wrote a song...

[Jack Leaf]

Once, when I was bored I started to write song. I never wrote it to computer, nor repaired it. But yesterday (or actually today) I refined this song and writed it to Word txt file.

I have no Idea what genre this should be, it can be punk rock, love song, heavy, Indrustial metal, pop or rock. Well, I hope you like it. - If you don't, you can say your feedback straight. I don't fear negative feedback, just post what you think. Here we go...

Covered Angel

Worried and depressed I just walked in the rain

Nothing felt so important right then, life was nothing more but pain and misery

And there's no painkiller for this disease

But then, I saw a girl in the rain

I went closer to her, and then I could see her clearly

Rain made her hair wet, and her eyes glitter

Her glance was sad, but beautiful

And she just stared something

She's the most beautiful girl in the world

Your covers can't lie to me

Your beauty tells who you are

Show your wings, you can't lie

I know who you are

You are an angel

Covered angel, oh yeah, an angel

You don't need your covers,

Angel

So I went closer and she said:

"For an eternity I've searched for my love, and now I found him"

I didn't know what to say, I just wanted her like a predator who is hunting bird

Without saying anything, she came closer and kissed me

She hugged me, and cried

"I want you, but do you see me?"

Your covers can't lie to me

Your beauty tells who you are

Show your wings, you can't lie

I know who you are

You are an angel

Covered angel, oh yeah, an angel

You don't need your covers,

Angel

She told me, how people tend her off and didn't agree her as she was

People didn't see her beauty

So am I alone?

People are as blind as mole in sunlight

Why do I see this angel clearly, but other's don't?

Am I the only one who can see trough her covers?

Why I am different?

(Long "aaahs"

Your covers can't lie to me

Your beauty tells who you are

Show your wings, you can't lie

I know who you are

You are an angel

Covered angel, oh yeah, an angel

You don't need your covers,

Angel

(If somebody idiot ever gets idea to play and sing this song, now the guitar faints, and the drums gain the main sound. Also the rhythm is changed to slow, happy and hopeful. Also the singer "changes" his voice)

We walked towards the new future

With new dreams

We fell in love

Nobody shall separate us

People are blind, but I am not

The sun rises and I think she showed her wings

This angel is perfect

Your covers can't lie to me

Your beauty tells who you are

Show your wings, you can't lie

I know who you are

You are an angel

Covered angel, oh yeah, an angel

You don't need your covers,

Angel

Do I really know who this girl is?

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Well, what do you think about it? Good, average or crap?

[Apollyon]

Well I'd say average, but considering that English isn't your first language, I'd say good.

[sneezer3]

What he said.

I also think some parts seem a little bit more poetic then others.

[Inoculator9]

Well, considering your a Fin ;) I'd say it's splittily blop considering English is your second language, just as Apollyon said :)

And I meant splittily blop in a good way ;)

[lowzeewee]

Considering that english is not your first language,I think that is just average so that means if english is your first language,it would be considered...nvm. :D

[Jack Leaf]

Considering that English is not my first language, I don't have no idea what splittily blob means... :D

Is it a blob, whitch is splitted? :P

And Sneezer3, if you ask from me, I think that there's no poethic in this song. It's like the new pop songs... :P

Whoops! I wrote "wigs", when I had to write "wings".

[sneezer3]

Its probbly just me. Great job i know its gotta be hard writeing a song haveing written small poems myself. But i'l give you an example of some parts.

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Worried and depressed I just walked in the rain

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Your covers can't lie to me

Your beauty tells who you are

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We walked towards the new future

With new dreams

We fell in love

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Bahh. I don't think it even much matters. I've seen songs come to think of it that has parts like that in them. :P

PS: Oh yeah and a blob is kind of a jell or it could be a creature made out of one. You might could consider jelly (jam) a blob. But i speak English and I have no idea what it means! One of those things that throw you off in a puzzling way but you kind of get the meaning. Kind of like somthing i've heard Australians say.(note not related with this forum) "Woah i'm Gobsmacked!"

[Jack Leaf]

Thanks about clearing things, sneezer3.

I will irritate you and make a new song! :D

[lowzeewee]

Sampsa,repeat after me:

I know I can.*Pauses* Improve my English *Pauses* If I work hard at it *Pauses* I can match Nema Fakei :D

[Jack Leaf]

"Fear is the key to what you want to be!"

Fear me! ::)

*falls into trance, and thinks about english and new songs*

Hmm... Dune... Ya hya Chouhada!

Nothing can be saved from Sampsa Lehti. Muahahah.

[lowzeewee]

*Moves into soothing R&B*

In the valley of evil.......I shall fear no evil....fear no darkness....fear........only Sampsa Lehti....Sampsa,how could you do this?Sampsa,how could you do that?Sampsa,how disappointing!The story ends here when Sampsa dies...... ;)