a little Warhammer 40k piece

[thomas]

not yet completed but here's what I have thus far

: The black beast lurched forward; belching out thick black smoke, as Private Joe Adamsky of the 104th Cadian Ivy Angels slammed his thick black boot onto the accelerator. The black Leman Russ had scores of bullet holes and scorch marks defacing her once beautiful black and gray camouflage exterior.

[ordos45]

Poor guys, ambushed by the Tau like that.

[thomas]

The large burst cannon mounted on the stealth suit spun slowly making loud clicks.

[thomas]

erm, any comments? ???

[ordos45]

Poor humanity...

[bryorama]

Poor humanity...

Very poor humanity....

[Danuary]

Great story

me wants more.

[thomas]

The two squads drifted across the pitted street. Their copper armor, dull and scratched. Their black fatigues worn and tattered.

[Apollyon]

Copper armour would be rather dangerous, I think. Also, you need work on grammar.

Despite that, I thought it was well-written with good, suitably written points of progression. It was an enjoyable read so nice job.

[thomas]

copper is the color of their armor, I should fix that  :)

[bryorama]

Copper armour would be rather dangerous, I think. Also, you need work on grammar.

Despite that, I thought it was well-written with good, suitably written points of progression. It was an enjoyable read so nice job.

Agreed.