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Misery

snc4113

By snc4113
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snc4113

snc4113

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This is my first one, so i don't know what your gonna think, just don't be to harsh, okay?

Misery and Pain

Misery, hostile, pain

Never stopping, never lessening

Forgiveness counts for nothing

Wanting to be held, hidden from the pain

Take it all away, forget mistakes made

The misery overcomes all hope.

Pushing, pulling, taking what doesn

Apollyon

Apollyon

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Not bad. I'd recommend a 4 line stanza instead of 3 as it tends to sound better when read. Please post these in the Poems thread at the top, that's what it's there for. As for terminology, I don't really see any and it's a weird thing to remark on anyway.??? Do you mean the many words linked to the title, such as 'hostile' and 'pain'?

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