thomas Posted April 29, 2004 Share Posted April 29, 2004 not yet completed but here's what I have thus far: The black beast lurched forward; belching out thick black smoke, as Private Joe Adamsky of the 104th Cadian Ivy Angels slammed his thick black boot onto the accelerator. The black Leman Russ had scores of bullet holes and scorch marks defacing her once beautiful black and gray camouflage exterior. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ordos45 Posted April 30, 2004 Share Posted April 30, 2004 Poor guys, ambushed by the Tau like that. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thomas Posted June 6, 2004 Author Share Posted June 6, 2004 The large burst cannon mounted on the stealth suit spun slowly making loud clicks. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thomas Posted June 16, 2004 Author Share Posted June 16, 2004 erm, any comments? ??? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ordos45 Posted June 16, 2004 Share Posted June 16, 2004 Poor humanity... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bryorama Posted June 18, 2004 Share Posted June 18, 2004 Poor humanity...Very poor humanity.... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Danuary Posted June 20, 2004 Share Posted June 20, 2004 Great story me wants more. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thomas Posted June 25, 2004 Author Share Posted June 25, 2004 The two squads drifted across the pitted street. Their copper armor, dull and scratched. Their black fatigues worn and tattered. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted June 25, 2004 Share Posted June 25, 2004 Copper armour would be rather dangerous, I think. Also, you need work on grammar.Despite that, I thought it was well-written with good, suitably written points of progression. It was an enjoyable read so nice job. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thomas Posted June 25, 2004 Author Share Posted June 25, 2004 copper is the color of their armor, I should fix that :) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bryorama Posted June 25, 2004 Share Posted June 25, 2004 Copper armour would be rather dangerous, I think. Also, you need work on grammar.Despite that, I thought it was well-written with good, suitably written points of progression. It was an enjoyable read so nice job.Agreed. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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