Apollyon Posted March 19, 2004 Share Posted March 19, 2004 Here is a new epic I'm working on. It will be largely iambic pentameter, except for bits such as the prologue. I hope you like it! :)Thanatine Struggle Prologue"So I shall tell a story,"Said he, never tiringOf the attention that wasSurely of his own invention."And it shall be an epic TaleOf a clash 'tween boldImmortalsAnd those yet far more frail,Hailed as mere mortals."His audience was hushed To silence, ever wantingA tale of even greter violence.And so did he begin:"In a time of greaterSin,There stood a man envelopedBy his crimesSo far that his very soul didBurn brighter than doth a star.He had killed a hundred, a thousand,More, and never did heAbide to any lesser mortal's law.But the candle that markedThat mighty warrior'sLife had over time turnedBlack as consequence untoHis own created strife.And all the more it burnedEver lower that he knew hisTime as sower was near atEnd and soon would comeThe time to reap the Death for which he was causeAnd feel upon his beared white Neck Satan's breath alongWith those terrible, deadly, sharpenedClaws. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inoculator9 Posted March 19, 2004 Share Posted March 19, 2004 Great stuff Apollyon :) You've always been a master, and I hope you'll get this stuff published soon. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted March 19, 2004 Author Share Posted March 19, 2004 Hehe thanks a lot! Me too. ;)Chapter 1Hellish, reckless chaos thunder broiledAmid the hastening storm furl'd withalCharging cavalry through charcoal clouds above,Beckoning omen lowly men unto.Rippling spears Heaven-cast mud-struck in flightOn polish'd order vainly died below,Clockwork-akin, line marching furious, Approaching citadel a-fore, clothedBlack like night's deepest opportunity.Dark entailed he within, a-peering:Vigil of first deceased since time's arrival,Servicemen storm persevered, restworthy now,Replaced relief would not let guardian cease. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inoculator9 Posted March 19, 2004 Share Posted March 19, 2004 It really is amazing to me that you so, apparently easy recreate this particular writing. It really feels like your reading some by Sir Alfred Lord Tenyson. It's a little more difficult to pull together, but in contemplating the style and the words you get the full depth of the story and the poetic beauty of this style of writing. Again, bravo :) Excellent stuff.Now if you'd only scroll down and read the short story I posted here :P Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted March 20, 2004 Author Share Posted March 20, 2004 Ta very much like.Those castle walls shone bright irridescence,Seated in realm at lowest station, hell-Like stature, cause, but on world physical,Linked through gate to planes other, more thanFlecks of flotsam on sea, needles evergreen,Or furtive stars overseeing men below.Castle master, Entroth named and soul,Lord of Callast, stricken land, with death fill'd.Murderer of many, butcherer of all, Thief to worlds thousand, harbinger of doom. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
snc4113 Posted March 20, 2004 Share Posted March 20, 2004 Its awesome so far, can't wait to read more! :) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted March 20, 2004 Author Share Posted March 20, 2004 Thanks! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Inoculator9 Posted March 21, 2004 Share Posted March 21, 2004 Brilliant stuff Apollyon, you really let it all flow well in a way that just sounds good when you read it to yourself. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted April 7, 2004 Author Share Posted April 7, 2004 Entroth eye-cast smil'd - 'twas sand in divine Sight, blocking image of truth to obscureShadow-light schemes and dark-silver counsel.War rag'd eternal 'cross madness melange -The world, existence, chaotic - full storm,Devouring towns, cities, lives and all thatLay in its dark inescapable pathSo that all the realm roar'd with slothful war.Slothful in far grander scale unhalting,For neither side had hope of triumph done,A war unbroken would play out it seem'd,'Till world itself was last undid by time. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apollyon Posted April 8, 2004 Author Share Posted April 8, 2004 He turned 'bout to whisper course to thoseNearby: generals three, once four, stood calm.One had fled to death not long ago - no loss,For he was in central cause gone at last,And had serv'd Entroth well all time throughout.Nodding assent, one left for journey long,Others spoke ranks, prepar'd for battle's song... Chapter 2Remembrance-abandon'd in dark abyss,He - a man unam'd, unfulfill'd in ken,Knowledge of self broken as a glass that,Holding water of memories, shattersAnd spills, flowing effervescent across The dusty surface of life archaic - Was lost in darken'd corridors a-swirl -A gate that robb'd him of being and selfIn entirety, leaving a man-husk,Fill'd not with known, only questions unknown.Vomited in final on parch'd red earth,He groan'd a crescendo - collaps'd in dark. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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